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Just Say It To My Face


Just tell me- Just say it to my face
Have I done something wrong?
We haven't talked for so long

Please listen:
Even a hello or a hi
I'm too used to goodbye

Now, Come here:
Is It because of the clothes that I wear?
Or the way I do my hair?

And look at me :
Look me in the eye
So I'm sure it's not a lie

Then tell me:
Don't text me, don't call me, don't write me a song
I just really want to know....if I've done something wrong

Just tell me- Just say it to my face
Please listen,
Now come here, 
And look at me, 
Then tell me,
Have I done something wrong?
We all make mistakes
We haven't talked for so long
We all have those days.

Just tell me- Just say it to my face

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The bathroom can be great place for inspiration ;>.
I was doing requests and and I told *XMajutsu-shiX to give me a line to write a poem about... so the line they gave me was:
Just tell me- Just say it to my face.
This is what they said:

Have you ever had a feeling that your friend is...acting differently? Sure they are not saying stupid stuff to your face, maybe that would be better...they are not saying anything and you have this tornado brewing up inside of you which makes you want to vomit- you know something is wrong. What do you do?
Thankfully I've never felt that way since I'm a very upfront person (as is my twin) So bewaaare!

And this popped up! Though they did give me a few ideas this nearly ate my brain.
I don't think you needed the last bit of information but....
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:iconshadow-54911:
SHADOW-54911 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
so...so...(weeps) BUTIFUL!!!


lol
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:iconanitakrizzan:
AnitaKrizzan Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
Lovely
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:iconlkay557:
lkay557 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Student Writer
this is soo great. i should try this with my friends that write a lot. 
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:icontypopocky:
TypoPocky Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist
*-* this is absolutely amazing :la:
ima gonna go back to writing my terrible essay now TT_TT
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Thanks very much! Good luck on your essay!
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:iconchinoise56:
chinoise56 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

Brilliant

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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
thanks!
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:iconfreefallhero:
FreeFallHero Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Now scroll back up and read it in the voice that Eminem has in "Kim".
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
I haven't heard that one! But have you heard Bully? That's awesome!
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:icontontodrop:
tontodrop Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
I just love this! You'te extremely talented :3
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Thanks :> 
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:icontoomanyflavors:
TooManyFlavors Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congrats on the well deserved dd =)
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
...sadly this doesn't have a daily deviation...
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:icontoomanyflavors:
TooManyFlavors Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
sorry that wasn't fr you..but i really would like it to be a part of daily deviation..^^
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:iconpanatmos:
Panatmos Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Hi! I don't know whether that is real or not, neither do I know whether you think it's real or not- but it's not. 
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:iconpanatmos:
Panatmos Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
sorry i didn't know ; < ;
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:iconelectricalflames:
ElectricalFlames Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
I wouldn't advise doing that. It's a scam.
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:iconpanatmos:
Panatmos Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
sorry i didn't know ; < ;
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:iconravenjeckel:
ravenjeckel Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
Oh boy do I ever know what it's like -.-" I'm 24 years old and I still deal with people shutting me out over immature things that they don't have the balls to tell me about to my face. 
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Those people are cowards if you ask me. 
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:iconravenjeckel:
ravenjeckel Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
Indeed they are, sorry for the late response. 
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SHADOW-54911 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
EXACTLY!!! people need to grow balls
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CoyoteInk Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
I absolutely love this. It is beautiful, and I am going through a situation just like this with a supposed friend of mine where he just abruptly stopped talking to me. I really love this, it really explains my side, and what did I do wrong? I LOVE THIS <333
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SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Thank you very much! I'm glad you can relate to it- wait I'm sorry you can relate to a situation like this...Thanks again! 
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:iconcoyoteink:
CoyoteInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Oh its alright! You're very welcome!!!
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:iconiridescentcatalyst:
IridescentCatalyst Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
I'm so used to being ignored in school, I just wish they would come to me and straight up tell me why no one talks to me.
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
It's better then getting the silent treatment that's for sure 
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:iconjinx-the-witch102:
Jinx-The-Witch102 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Dear god... this makes me think so much of my cousins and some other people...
Nearly 3 years and no word... besides seeing eachother nearly daily on facebook... and they still don't bother sending messages either. Long distance and ignorant people both suck.
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Wow, they are just idiots
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:iconjinx-the-witch102:
Jinx-The-Witch102 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student General Artist
:shrug: It's not that bad. Better to let them be ignorant really
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:iconkupkate95:
KupKate95 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
You have no idea how well I can relate to this. I wrote something very similar a few weeks ago actually :)
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
Could you send me the link? I'd love to read it :>
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:iconkupkate95:
KupKate95 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
I'll have to type it, but I'll let you be the first to see it. :)
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Student Artist
Yey!!
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LisaGreywood Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The same advice can be given to the speaker. If you think something's up, ask. It might not have anything to do with you, and the "tornado brewing inside you" might also be affecting YOUR behavior, which probably doesn't help the situation.
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Artist
up..thankfully I've never felt like that- I'm a very upfront person!
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LisaGreywood Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I meant more a general you, not you personally. :) Since I know some people do agonize over stuff like this instead of just asking about it.
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Artist
:>  I agree though, a poem could be written to both sides of the situation
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SaxonPride Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013

The Muses take us at odd times, no? For you it's trips to the bathroom, for me it's unwanted bouts of insomnia. Our minds are wonderfully strange.


Now, onto business. I like this poem. I will confess that when I read poetry I usually prefer a more jaunty style, a sing-song manner which one can almost sing inside their head as they read the words from the page. However, with the subject matter you presented, I feel that the style of this piece fits well.


It is stilted, breathless, the frantic plea of a neurotic friend. Indeed, the neurosis here is tangible. The accusations of the narrator doing nothing but revealing their own insecurities, the fear of superficiality, the fear of being deceived, the simple fear of loneliness and the willingness to forgive in order to simply have someone.

All in all, I think this piece is very intriguing, deals with themes a great many of us can sympathise with and is a credit to you as an artist.


Take care :)

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SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Artist
Thanks! Thankyou very much for this wonderful long comment!. (It made me feel special ovo)
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:iconsaxonpride:
SaxonPride Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
Good artists deserve to feel special ;)
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Artist
I will take your comment as a critique- and an extremely wonderful critique it was...without any critiques but still :>
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starrysky963 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist
Very nice! :clap: You know, I find I always get my best inpiration when I'm lying in bed trying to go to sleep. It's both productive and counter-productive at the same time. :D
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Artist
My brain starts working when I'm angry, annoyed, sad, emotional or if something happened which I base my poems on! 
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TheTinfoilRat Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this ^^. And it's true, the bathroom is a great place for inspiration! :XD:
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Artist
Thanks! And yes I sure is!
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BlackJudgement Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
 i indeed did not need the last information ._.

otherwise this is going to my favorites~
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:iconsorcererwithapen:
SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Artist
:> I couldn't help it!
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