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If Truth had a tongue

All your armies, all your men

All your hate, against a pen

 

Struggling poet

Broken words

 

Cold still coffee

Broken birds  


Against a boy- stone in hand

Tightening hands on rubber band

 

In his eyes see brightening hope

To strengthen (still) the breaking rope

 

Of justice, rights and human love

As airplanes hover up above

And I wonder, hands are shaking

Faith is crumbling, words are breaking

 

Torn up hope and spirits broken,

Muting people when words are spoken,

 

Time is racing against a pen,

And I wonder once again,

 

Who is weak, and who is strong?
Who is right, and who is wrong?


And I wish, whilst blood is dripping

Chains are beating, whips are whipping

 

See the image- bleeding men

Hear the clock chime- broken pen

 

Again I wonder and I wish

 

If only the truth had words to speak

Words to tell when days are bleak

 

Peace to spread when nights grow cold

Separating lead from gold

 

Hands to warm when corpses lie

Their people hate, our people die


And I wonder, now I think


We as people, stand as none

Enemy lines all stand as one

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OK. So I haven't been updating for a while now but I hope this poem makes up for it. It's got a very simple rhyme scheme and I kept it that way for a reason! Critiques are welcomed- though please do try and give reasons for each statement you make :> I am currently trying to improve my writings but you can't really impress everyone can you? If there is one person who likes your work there has to be one person who doesn't... but that's fine since everyone has their own likes and dislikes :-)

So anyway hope you like the new poem it's got a lot of different...erm ideas... to it. Thank you for the birthday wishes and to Ikoter and lunatical-miracle for the points! Oh and to ikoter, I will get around to doing the second part of confessions of a King soon! 

Enough of my...'description'

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pie46733 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow that was wonderful
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charminbluebell Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOW! I am literally reading all of your poems and you are doing so well! But I love this one! It's so deep and meaningful! You must have had a lot and a lot of practice!!!!!!! Great job! No seriously, I mean it!
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HannahTheWriter123 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful!~ 0w0
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cleoking Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oooh i loved this great job!
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Sakura-Yotobari Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely phenomenal! So amazing and inspiring. You have the wonderful gift of a beautiful mind <3
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SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Student Artist
Thankyou for the comment! I'm happy you liked it, your comment made my day!
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lunatical-miracle Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome! >< once again your poem made me feel all fan-girl. Is it possible to be a poet's fan-girl....?
heh. sorry, i'm weird.
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SorcererWithAPen Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Student Artist
Don't worry, being weird is good! I'm glad you liked my poem, thanks for the comment! :>
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lunatical-miracle Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe. Your welcome~
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PinkSparkleDuck Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
I think it's great. Honestly just keep writing-"practice makes perfect"(hate to use a rather cliched term but hey....)
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